Great reminders. I am actively working to improve my use of fresh and unexpected metaphors. When I sat in a grove of aspens on the side of a mountain a couple of weeks ago, I struggled to find a way to describe them in a way that would do them justice. Finally, knowing my intended audience included many fans of musical theatre and dance, I came up with this:
"The leaves of the aspen trees, with a musicality beyond my comprehension, shimmer and wave like a million tiny jazz hands at the crescendo of creation."
I’m new to Substack, new to writing in this form. I’ve kept a journal since high school off and on and I occasionally write short essays/stories on my instagram. I’m jumping in the pond here with others to learn how to improve this art form God has given me a passion for. I look forward to learning more. Thanks
Great reminders. I am actively working to improve my use of fresh and unexpected metaphors. When I sat in a grove of aspens on the side of a mountain a couple of weeks ago, I struggled to find a way to describe them in a way that would do them justice. Finally, knowing my intended audience included many fans of musical theatre and dance, I came up with this:
"The leaves of the aspen trees, with a musicality beyond my comprehension, shimmer and wave like a million tiny jazz hands at the crescendo of creation."
Beautiful! Our aspens will change soon here and I’ll remember this!
This was wonderful and so helpful. Thank you so much Suzy!
You’re very welcome!
I’m new to Substack, new to writing in this form. I’ve kept a journal since high school off and on and I occasionally write short essays/stories on my instagram. I’m jumping in the pond here with others to learn how to improve this art form God has given me a passion for. I look forward to learning more. Thanks
Thank you Janet! Welcome to Substack!
I loved this entry, especially the great metaphors from literature, a walk back through my lessons in senior English.
I never get tired of good metaphors.
Thanks Edna. I loved putting it together!